Writing self-evaluation T3W6

WALT:self evaluate our writing.

Here is my self evaluation presentation the one thing I like about writing is that I get to write cool stories about the community and the people around me.

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How to use a telephone/self assessment.

How to use a telephone!!

Hey there you there do you know how a telephone works well if you don’t listen up the first telephone was created by Alexander Graham bell he was a very famous scientists here are a few easy steps for you to learn.

first you have to plug in your mounting cord into the jack so it can connect to the network you are working with for example: telecom. This is really important because if you don’t plug in your mounting cord then the network cannot let you use your telephone.

Now you have to pick up the handset from the switch hook and dial in your number in the keypad for example: (this is the emergency number for the hospital.) You dial 111

Then your voice travels through the transmitter then through the handset then into the jack then a robot will voice wave your voice and send it to the person who you want to talk to.

DIAGRAMS AND CHARTS:

HERE IS A LINK TO SHOW HOW A TELEPHONE WORKS!!

Link 1

Now you know how to use a normal telephone stay in tuned for my next explanation…...

Ideas:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R3	I put lots of ideas in and I think I feel comfortable at this level

Structure and Language:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R3	because I put some structure and language in not all

Organisation:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R4	I can sequence my ideas

Punctuation:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R3	I can put fullstops and capital letters in my story

Sentence Structure:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R3	I can write a long sentence but a small story that makes sence

Vocabulary:

I gave myself a:	Because:
R3	I can use verbs and figurative language

Spelling

I gave myself a:	Because:
R6	I can spell almost all words correctly

Here is my writing assessment and writing.

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Zoo writing T4 W8

When we entered the Auckland zoo I saw the leemars in the meerkats enclosure they ran off and went to hawaii to go have a holiday  then I saw something colourful and bright I walked over to it. It was a parrot I saw it eating fruit the zoo keeper told me that it was on a diet. Then it flew around it looked outside I wondered if I should give it some freedom and I did. I opened the net and let it free lucky no one was watching me. Then we went to the tigers the tigers were camouflaged so we couldn't see them properly. So we just walked away We saw the lizard they were tiny but magnificent then I turned around and saw a huge elephant. The zoo keeper told me its name its name was annabelle. It was a she I stood there for a little while then walked away with my mum and dad. Then I heard a big growl I knew it was the lions I walked over and saw a tiger in the lions cage. The lion and a tiger getting married wow that was pretty awesome then I saw the flamingos they were pretty and pink standing on one leg i was feeding a chicken they walked around me then I saw a feral ( a feral is a dangerous animal) it was a crocodile I stepped away ok I got a admission it was all in my imagination.

The volcano

Its silent cold the wind blows behind my back, the moon shines bright it looks like a picture in my book my book is called eye of inspiration. In the distance I could see a island then suddenly the lake and I started to shake I fell to the ground and hit my head a few hours past and I woke up. I looked at my watch it was time for me to go to work while I was getting change I wondered what the rumbling was. I jumped in my car and travelled to work oops did I forget to introduce myself my name is daphne griffin I am a detective.

Anyways where was I oh yes I was on my way to work in my car I parked in the parking lot and ran inside i tried not to be seen until someone called my name it was my manager I walked inside his office he was giving me a growling for being after that he calmed down and gave me a investigation. “This investigation is for you kiddo” he gave me the detail I freaked “my lake my lake” I said.

Yes your lake my manager said the problem was that everybody around heard rumbling hey I heard rumbling to so there you go i'm sending you on a boat to the lost island thats where mr and mrs higgins heard the rumbling most the next day my boat arrived I hopped on the boat and we travelled to lost island. Its called lost island because when people went on that island they never came back. When we were here I jumped of the boat and started to explore. I started to get scared so I ran I saw a volcano I stopped and said open sesame the volcano opened. I saw treasure and grabbed I walked out the volcano it started to erupt. I was scared I ran of the island it stopped rumbling  I jumped on the boat and went home I was rich for the rest of my  life and never ever went to that island ever again.  

Two Children

Franky and I was standing there watching people crawl across the road I turned around I saw kids getting taken away from their parents franky stood there and watched how  parents were bleeding and screaming on the road the rain began to turn red I was in horror I grabbed franky and started to hug her I told a story to hr it was about four kids who were brothers and sisters they were living in a cottage then a wizard came and then turned their dreams into wishes when the rain stopped soldier started running and finding little kids they were speaking in a language that I have never heard before I looked around curiously why are they taking away the children said franky I didn't know what to so back so  just covered her and I was scared to death i wondered will they take us to I peeked out the hole a soldier found us what will i do what will we do I was sitting there with no amount of time then I fought of a plan i told franky to close her eyes she did i picked her up and ran i ran like I was riding a horse cabin I found a hole i told franky to open her eyes and hide in there the place was big for both of us so franky jumped in first then I jumped in it was dark i told franky to keep it down i could hear soldier running past us as they were screaming like they were saying find them now franky and i slept there until the next day I was the first one to wake up I peeked my bog head out of the whole no soldier no nothing? while franky was sleeping I went hunting for food and water i went to the lake  

Today for writing I was writing a narrative about two kids that are running away from soldiers and trying to save themselves I have not finished my story yet but I hope you enjoy

CHARAECTERS: Me Franky

SETTING: CITY     

warm Fuzzies

Today our class have been learning about how to solve conflict and keep peace in our relationships. To practice this, we wrote "Warm Fuzzies" about our classmates to practice making positive decisions about the words we choose to use when we speak to others. Here is my Warm Fuzzy about Lyric.